rubyknight1
Aqualla
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The World is a strange and wonderful place!
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Post by rubyknight1 on Dec 23, 2011 8:28:10 GMT
I may allow people to add caractors, but for now, it's only my charactors.
Produced Chapters: Part 1-Hunted Prologue: Once Again, a Failure
Charactors: Fezhi Brightblade A compassionate catcher who has tried to catch a tak which is near impossible to catch. The Shadow Tak (Name:Unknown) A smart and swift tak which escapes all traps and catchers.
Stalkers Our first stalker is The Sun Magpie! You're very very lucky!
Prologue: Once Again, a Failure A dziraga catcher's life is tough, especially if you are me.
For 2 years I have aimed to catch a dragon. It should have been the easiest dragon ever to catch-it was just a meer shadow tak. But it was special. But I do not give up, I do not yeild-no matter what, I shall catch it. On my name, Fezhi Brightblade, I will catch that dragon!
Now I hunt and and approach the cunning beast, as I have for the past 2 years. Maybe one day my dedication will earn me a reward.
I approached the beast with my bait and gear, awaiting the perfect moment to set out my ellaborate trap. The quiet innocent tak stood out in the field. I put out some of the shadow tak's favourite food and then waited. But I soon as it approached, it saw me and noted it was a trap. I failed as I flailed around with the net, attempting to catch the beast. But no luck, and the beast took the food and run. I had failed again.
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Post by MagpieBird777 on Dec 23, 2011 16:03:02 GMT
Ooh! I like!
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Post by Lonin on Dec 23, 2011 18:25:40 GMT
XD Lulz that's awesome
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rubyknight1
Aqualla
[AWD:01]
The World is a strange and wonderful place!
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Post by rubyknight1 on Dec 23, 2011 20:15:35 GMT
Thanks everyone!
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Post by MagpieBird777 on Dec 23, 2011 23:04:08 GMT
Hey, I'm stalking!
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rubyknight1
Aqualla
[AWD:01]
The World is a strange and wonderful place!
Posts: 175
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Post by rubyknight1 on Dec 26, 2011 22:30:45 GMT
Yay! Our first stalker!
First Chapter will be up soon.
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Post by MagpieBird777 on Dec 27, 2011 17:32:49 GMT
Cool, I can't wait!
The creature flew along on glistening wings, speeding past trees. It left nothing behind bar a gust of wind, rustling the leaves, and a single dark plume. It had seen the first signs of a new tale unwinding, of a new creature telling a story. It suddenly stopped it's silent, swift flight and perched on a branch. Below it was a storyteller, preparing to begin. The creature settled on the branch. It listened as the tale begun...
Yay, I just wrote my little "I'm stalking a story" paragraph on the fly! (YouseewhatIdidthere?)
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rubyknight1
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The World is a strange and wonderful place!
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Post by rubyknight1 on Jan 1, 2012 12:19:44 GMT
Okay, here we are with Chapter 1.
Chapter 1: Eternal Rivals As I returned from the failure I had endured so many times before, I sighed to go back to my home in Garamond. I slumped over back home, where my mother awaited me, one of the most famous catchers known for her success, Solara Brightblade. Sparky, a blue night vaku we kept for a pet, welcomed me back with a wake up jolt. "How did it go today, sweetie?" she asked. "Same as last time, just another failure." I said, but I kept my head high. "You'll catch it one day." she said, then pet Sparky and departed for the shops. "Someday.... that tak will be mine!" I thought maliciously.
As I followed my mother and Sparky to the shops, I saw somebody out of the corner of my eye. It was my evil rival, Cybell "Well, well, well..... it's Fezhi the half-witted dziraga catcher." Cybell taunted. "Cybell, the dziraga I've been hunting is smart. I'd like to see you try and catch it." Fezhi said. "Well, unlike you, I have one boon - money." she said smugly. "Yes, unlike my family, your family is in on it to give the little things in your shop to owners that sometimes don't even care about it for your own gain. What a 'brilliant' way to treat creatures who depend on you for their own welfare after it is caught." I stormed off, and she said, "Well, let's see how smart you are when I catch that demon."
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Post by Lonin on Jan 1, 2012 12:34:19 GMT
XD Awww poor Fezhi needs to catch that pesky Tak!
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rubyknight1
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Post by rubyknight1 on Jan 2, 2012 12:51:31 GMT
OK, full chapter up. I'll also take a few forms for charactors right now, because I have no idea who they could be.
I need Fezhi's brother (Yes she has a brother) ideas and A shopkeeper idea.
SHe does need to, before Cybell catches it!
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Heartmane
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Post by Heartmane on Jan 2, 2012 15:22:23 GMT
Shopkeeper could be a dwarf/halfbreed, Fezhi's brother would be a snarky elf or halfbreed (as we don't know Fez's species)
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Post by MagpieBird777 on Jan 2, 2012 15:23:38 GMT
A shopkeeper? Hmm... Idea forming in head!
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Heartmane
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Post by Heartmane on Jan 2, 2012 15:27:34 GMT
Also, you might want to make the paragraphs a lil longer. Otherwise it's great. Storystalkermode (completely unrelated).
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Post by MagpieBird777 on Jan 2, 2012 15:36:56 GMT
The shopkeeper could be some eccentric tinkerer dude XD That might be fun to write.
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rubyknight1
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Post by rubyknight1 on Jan 3, 2012 13:08:37 GMT
I'll try to make it a little longer.
Okay, what about names?
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